Jogan...
Khud se anjaan
Duniya se bekhabar
Na koi manzil
Na koi humsafar…
Bas akeli chali jaa rahi thi…
Woh jogan teri, jeeye jaa rahi thi…
Poocha naam kya hai?
To tumhara naam bata diya….
Poocha ghar ka pata kya hai?
To tumhara thikana suna diya…
Poocha kiska intzaar hai
To tumhara khat dikha diya…
Banwri si lag rahi thi…
Ishq ishq chilla rahi thi…
Maano pyaar hi uski bhasha hai
Mohabbat hi uska majhab…
Kisine kaha diwaani hai..
Kisine kaha pagal hai…
Ishq mein doobi woh ladki
Maine kaha ek jogan hai….
Kabhi us gali bhi gujar jaana…
Us jogan se bhi mil aana……
Koi pooche kis ghar jaana hai…
To apna hi naam bata dena…
Duniya se bekhabar
Na koi manzil
Na koi humsafar…
Bas akeli chali jaa rahi thi…
Woh jogan teri, jeeye jaa rahi thi…
Poocha naam kya hai?
To tumhara naam bata diya….
Poocha ghar ka pata kya hai?
To tumhara thikana suna diya…
Poocha kiska intzaar hai
To tumhara khat dikha diya…
Banwri si lag rahi thi…
Ishq ishq chilla rahi thi…
Maano pyaar hi uski bhasha hai
Mohabbat hi uska majhab…
Kisine kaha diwaani hai..
Kisine kaha pagal hai…
Ishq mein doobi woh ladki
Maine kaha ek jogan hai….
Kabhi us gali bhi gujar jaana…
Us jogan se bhi mil aana……
Koi pooche kis ghar jaana hai…
To apna hi naam bata dena…
posted by Shilpa F D'Mello at 12:48 PM
2 Comments:
Very Nice...
loved it
last stanza didnt quite impress. according to me it shouldnt be even there as it looks forced and also makes it predictable.
try to make it more deep by only depicting the pang and angst of the jogan rather then brining her loves perspective in angle.
in a nutshell the build up is good but the end needs refinement.
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